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Pale Horse
09-25-2009, 01:45 PM
Hannah*
by


Ward Rev. E.L. Crehtar:

Ah!
Anna hems party ruffles;
reknit strips on slip up lamina.
Time stops denim now.

Ergo, desserts deliver a deified
rail. A liar deified.

A reviled stressed ogre won.
Mined spots emit
animal pupils. No spirts tinker,
self fury traps me,
'Hannah' -
a rather clever draw.


*Hannah means 'Grace' in Hebrew


My original work....

Rocket Surgeon
09-25-2009, 01:54 PM
Brilliant! I do need some more time to refelect on it though...interesting choices, pacing and turn of a phrase.

Finn
09-25-2009, 02:40 PM
Seconded. Utter brilliance.

Stoo
09-25-2009, 03:39 PM
That's one heck of a palindrome, Paley! Wow.:hat: Here's my meagre contribution:

"Able was I ere I saw Elba" - Napoleon Bonaparte

AlivePoet
09-25-2009, 11:14 PM
Yes, this is good work. Didn't know you were a poet, PH. :hat:

(Apologies for the barely-adequate comment...I'll have more to say on this later, right now I'm just a little exhausted from the dance floor...)

Nurhachi1991
09-26-2009, 12:21 PM
Changed my life