Another poem by Pale Horse

[Pale Horse]

“Epitaph”

Betwixt the grass blades stoic guard
On stone-faced sentinels esplanade,
Stand servants to that noble cause
Foreboding nature’s cruelest law.

Beset by youth they wait revenge
On mortal generations end.
Recruiting souls: “Surrender here,”
United pleas to disappear.

“Beware the black this wicked eve”;
One gallant soldier’s last reprieve.
His finite numbers carved in white,
Eternal debts owed for his life.

Below the realm of consciousness
Come forth his lines of last defense
Bedazzled vengeance for his crimes
A transcendental dirge sublime:

“Bereft of fire, bequeathed from shame,
Beguiled by vice, betrothed to bane.
Bemused in angst, that beloved grief,
Befitting torment, betrayed conceit.

Beneath the stygian, bemired in waste,
Begrudging misery beseeching grace.
Beyond salvation, my befitting end,
Bewitching torture does begin again”

[Joe Brody]

Shouldn't this be in the Indy IV table?

(it's great, btw)

[Aaron H]

Shouldn't this be in the Indy IV table?

(it's great, btw)
Why the Indy IV?

Great poem...Betwixt has to be one of my favorite words to used in everyday speech, people get such the funniest look on their faces as they try to understand what I just said.:)

[ninepinejones]

Brilliant! Im feeling betwixt myself, right about now, scalling walls of murmur words from them to me somehow::D

[vaxer]

I can only say it "sounds" nice... because I don't understand half of the words. :o

[Joe Brody]

Why the Indy IV?

On a lighter note -- it just seemed like some of the language could apply to the few faithful waiting for the next film.

[Pale Horse]

Shouldn't this be in the Indy IV table?

(it's great, btw)

Thank you, on all accounts above.

[Pale Horse]

On a lighter note -- it just seemed like some of the language could apply to the few faithful waiting for the next film.


Almost ironic now, isn't it.

[Pale Horse]

Transient

But as a rose more handsome held
in pious porcelain vase;
So too, would I, should maiden's hands
surround my resting face.

And drowning in her reservoir
of comfort cold and deep;
So like the rose, it's head hung low;
will I too, fade asleep.

[Doc Savage]

Bravissimo, Thanatos. I am duly impressed.

[Deadlock]

Good work, Pale, on both efforts.

(But what about screenwriting?) :confused:

[Pale Horse]

Okay, Okay you're right.

You and I had chated once about my screeplay, and you were cautious about the subject matter. Would you mind reading what I got thus far? Others care to read and comment too?

[Deadlock]

Have you made some progress? I'd be interested in taking another look.

[roundshort]

Okay, Okay you're right.

You and I had chated once about my screeplay, and you were cautious about the subject matter. Would you mind reading what I got thus far? Others care to read and comment too?

I would love to take a look, but I hope sobriety has not lost creativity, you know what the Belle Epoque artists thought of alcohol being a muse . . .

[Pale Horse]

I would love to take a look, but I hope sobriety has not lost creativity, you know what the Belle Epoque artists thought of alcohol being a muse . . .

What, are you saying my poem is tripe? :p

[Joe Brody]

Sign me up for the sewing circle. . .

[Pale Horse]

Why is this starting to read more and more like Usual Suspects mixed with Susan Glaspell's "A Jury of Her Peers".

Gents I will need your email addresses. I trust you all can read .rtf format?

[roundshort]

What, are you saying my poem is tripe? :p

No I am saying i like Absinthe . . .


I was saying I would hate your non-drinking to hurt your creativity! (It is my job to keep as many people drinking heavily as possible! Like I say in my A.A. meetings, NO BODY LIKES A QUITTR!

[Moedred]

I too am interested in giving it a read. I wrote half a screeplay once, before starting construction on a coupla novels. Westerns, yee haw!