Cross of Salvation

Ray Hare

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Hi guys I have been working on this for ages this is just a snippet of a completed screenplay tell me what you think
i want to get it to George Steven Harrison or MarshallI know it is a long shot but hey I have to give it a go.
Regards :) :)


EXT. GENGHIS KHAN'S TOMB. afternoon. darkening.

The camera follows a line of white fire shooting into the air EXPLODING into a cascade of BRIGHT RED. A FLARE.

The SPARKLING WATERFALL of colour stands out against the ever darkening skies.

One of the men left behind by Indy & Zhou puts down the smoking flare gun after just firing off the last signal.

He nods affirmatively to his counterpart as he walks towards him & joins him next to a small fire.

A large menacing RUMBLE is heard off in the distance. They both look up anxiously.

The source of the noise reveals itself over the horizon. A convoy of trucks charge through the snow..

Each of the vehicles marked with the red star of Communist China..THE P.L.A..Chinese People Liberation Army.

INT. GENGHIS KHAN'S TOMB.

Indy steps away from the last golden guard having disabled its firing system.

INDY
That's it.

ZHOU
(standing up & giving Indy the broken piece of glass) There..maybe you can stick it back together & regain some of that luck.

Indy & Zhou move further into the chamber.

Before them on the floor is a solid gold circle.

Embedded in the floor around it, a ring of gems, of all shapes & colours shine.

On the disk itself, etched into the gold, is an imposing portrait of Genghis Khan. He is depicted wearing a Mongolian battle head dress..a metal helmet with a large spike fixed to its peak with a leather strip attached to its base protecting the back & side of his neck..

His eyes watch, waiting, protecting his tomb.

Indy notices...

a small square hole directly in the center of the rim, just above Khan's forehead.

INDY
This looks like the spot.

Indy places his hand into his satchel & pulls out a square cube with a diamond on it.

INDY
(looking at the cube) Lets hope this works.

Indy slowly moves towards the hole & kneels down before it.

Zhou watches.

Indy takes the block & gently places it into the space.

A moment passes.

Suddenly the room begins to SHAKE.

Indy steps back just before the gold circle begins to separate in the middle.

Both Indy & Zhou stare into the hole.

INSTANTLY FIRE from inside the depression sheds light on its treasures.

Indy & Zhou's face GLOW from not only the fire but the riches they have just uncovered.

INDY
(tilting his hat back from his forehead wiping the sweat from his brow) Fortune AND glory.


Zhou points to skeletal remains in the hole.

ZHOU
What..no..who are they?

Indy looks down into the shallow pit.

Amongst the treasures are bones surrounding Genghis Khan's jewel encrusted coffin.

INDY
I guess dead men keep secrets.

EXT. GENGHIS KHAN'S TOMB. AFTERNOON. Darkening.

The convoy of five army trucks have arrived at the entrance of the tomb.

The once desolate landscape is now a hive of activity..

As a number of soldiers jump from trucks unfolding the canvases covering the back of the vehicles pulling out ropes & abseiling equipment.

The two men left behind waiting for Indy & Zhou stand shivering in the cold. But it's more than the weather making their teeth chatter.Four Chinese soldiers, with RPD light machine guns poised, surround them.

As the ropes are being thread into the tomb's entrance a thin, steely man, dressed in a Chinese winter military uniform, walks with measured steps, towards the two men left behind by Indy & Zhou.

It is VAN LEUNG distinctly marked with a scar from an unknown past etched deeply from the left corner of his mouth crossing his cheek to a partially mauled left ear.

He is obviously a man who gets things done, when no one else can.

LEUNG
Who went with the American?

IN UNISON THE TWO MEN
ZHOU!

LEUNG
You have served your country well.

Leung nods to two gun holding soldiers.

They grab the two men & lead them away.

LEUNG
I want all men in position. Dr Jones can not be under estimated. líqù (GO)

The two remaining soldiers take up a position around the entrance to the tomb. The other soldiers now possessing machine guns are preparing to abseil down into the tomb.

One by one the troops start their quiet descent.

Leung too prepares himself.
 

Johnny Nys

Member
Mm, interesting. You caught my attention. What timeframe is this story set in? Only one thing bothered me, with the introduction of Van Leung: a scar-faced villain is a little too comic-booky for me, but that's a matter of opinion. Depends on the make-up department to make it not look too stereotypical.
 

The Drifter

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Not too bad; I like it! Also, it seems a lot of fans are wanting an Indy adventure that's set in a snowy part of the world. We seen a bit of it in Nepal.
Also, I liked the mystery you have in that short snippet, but you left it with a cliffhanger! ;)
 

Col. Detritch

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Very nice. I enjoyed the oriental element and the SNOW! :D

Johnny Nys said:
Van Leung: a scar-faced villain is a little too comic-booky for me, but that's a matter of opinion.
Another idea for the villain could be that he isn't scarred until the end of the opening scene. Maybe Indy does this to him (something to do with dogs or a smahsed across the face with a rock). Its not completely original but it opens the door to a darker, grittier scene in the movie and more justified animosity between hero (anti-hero) and villain. Just a thought.

However, I loved that as I read this it wasn't obvious (and to be honest didn't even matter) whether it was set in 1959 or 1939. It was vintage Indy in a mysterious and Raiders-esqe adventure, and that's how a script for Indy 5 should be approached- no age attached. Keep up the good work! :hat:
 
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Ray Hare

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More indy

Thanks guys! Good point Johnny about the scar of Leung..i was actually looking 4 that 'cliche villian' so much part of the indy universe.. Drifter..another cliff hanger below..hopefully like those 1930s serials indys based on..plus a bit of 50s 60s cold war stuff..col. dietrietch..the origin of scar is not explaiined 2 make you think man whats this guy been up 2..some demon in his past..but i like your idea..and leung does do something bad 2 indy that creates tension between them..but thats a secet :D thanks 4 the compliment!
Below is an exert from later in the movie...Brouhan is Sallah's oil drilling son..he drills into the earth while Sallah dug .Ryan is an ex-student of Indy and very important in the discovery of the macguffin. Harding and Thorne are with the American government after Indy. I wonder why? That's a secret too...Enjoy



EXT. BROUHAN'S BOAT. MIDDAY. SUNNY.

A United States U2 SPY-PLANE BOOMS over Brouhan's boat again just clearing its radio antennas-it has followed the signal transmitted by the small tracking device planted by the dock worker!

As the plane's noise dies down the BUZZ of out board motors can be heard.

Four rubber rafts, each occupied by three armed marines in black diving suits, SPEED in a straight line towards the boat.

Two break off heading to the port side of the boat, the other two continue on the same course to the starboard side of Brouhan's boat.

The four rubber vessels move through the water shadowing the cruiser as it approaches the Turkish wharf.

On the pier waiting to welcome them..

stands Thomas Thorne & General Harding.

A garrison of armed soldiers behind them, adds some extra bulk to the welcoming committee.

INT.BRIDGE OF BROUHAN'S BOAT.

Crew members scurry back & forth reading screens. Indy stands next to Brouhan staring out the huge window at the action going on outside.

Indy surveys the situation..

INDY
Thorne. He's like a bad penny..he always turns up.
Indy looks at Brouhan..

INDY
I'll need your help.

BROUHAN
Of course..anything.

INDY
(smiles) Do you have a map of this town?

EXT. TURKISH PORT. midday. sunny

Now escorted by the rubber rafts, Brouhan's boat prepares to dock at the wharf..

The boat finally comes to a complete stop as we focus on the loading door at its rear.

With the sound of CREAKING wheels and chains we watch the loading door slowly lower.

Under the watchful eyes of Thorne & Harding.

It hits the pier with a THUD.

Thorne waves his arm & the soldiers move into position covering the opening.

A moment passes & nothing happens.

The soldiers squeeze their weapons as they start to become anxious.

Harding looks to Thorne.

SUDDENLY THE RUMBLE OF THE INDIANA JONES MAIN THEME FILLS THE CINEMA.

Bursting out of the darkness of the cargo bay, is a horse mounted by a fedora wearing rider..INDIANA JONES!

INDY
Yah! Yah!

Indy & his horse bound through the startled soldiers.

They jump out of his way trying to avoid being trampled by the hooves of the runaway horse.

He charges up the pier making it to the top of the street.

Once there Indy turns back to the soldiers grinning as he rears up his horse & pounds away.

Just as Thorne & Harding's men recover from Indy's dramatic exit the SCREECHING of tyres grab their attention..

A topless car speeds out of the boat's cargo bay..

Its passengers?

Marion Ryan & Sallah!

The car ROARS up the wharf dispersing the soldiers..

forcing some to dive into the water!

When the tear away vehicle reaches the spot where we last saw Indy they head in the opposite direction to which he turned.

Thorne & Harding still on the wharf watch the mayhem unfold.

THORNE
They won't get far. :whip:
 

Ray Hare

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super shadow

Yep thats it! I took the same idea from another website where it was posted and tweaked it and created my screenplay. The story is based on Lucas story...but I like most screen writers developed the idea exploring different ways to tell it. Thats why I want to get it to George! I don't want to wait another 20 years! :D
 
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