Sorry for unearthing this ancient thread, but I have just finished reading this.
This MASSIVE story is available here:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1973091/1/Indiana-Jones-and-the-Gypsy-s-Kiss (primate/monkey also uploaded hos other stroy to that site).
I used
https://fichub.net/ to dowwnload the story as an pdf and used a german service (similar to your lulu.com) to make a paperback out of it (did the same with Sunken Continent, which is the other story by monkey). Judging from the synopyses I have read I created a cover using existing artworks.
The books turned out a lot bigger than the other Indy-books in my shelves.
I decided to give these fanstories a go since i was hungry for new Indy-material after the FoA, SoK and Smoking Mirror - fannovels (and I will read others like Sword of Gods, Curse of the Nile and Prisoners of he Damned in the future). The reviews on these two fanstories here and other places indicated that this is a really great Indy-story ... and I have to agree wholeheartedly.
The pacing of the book is exceptional. The chapters are held rather short so you can read a couple of chapters in one go. Other novel often have such huge chapters that you can not finish them in one session. The tension is always kept high and a lot of cliffhangers are used to keep you invested in the story. SoK had a lot of "changes of the settings/locals" , this one also has a lot of locations BUT unlike SOK, it really works here. Indy and Vadoma are getting chased across Europe by the authorities, Nazis and other baddies. From the start of their escape you know where they want to go and which route they want to take so it make a lot of sense to the reader. There are a lot of action sequences in the book and it felt like that there was always something exciting happening. This worked a lot better than SOK for me. In understand that this story was released chapter by chapter on this site years ago and you can really tell by the way it was written because of the use of the cliffhangers
The opening-segment in the Inca temple and the chase on the train and the river was very suspenseful and a rather big opening piece. It gave you a good introduction to the pace of this story.
Akhenaton and Nefertiti are used as the background for the McGuffin. The Armana-period is probably the most interesting in the history of Egypt and gives a lot of potential for an Indy-Story. The McGuffin is explained near the beginning of the book but it rarely gets mentioned in the middle of the story, which focuses on Indy´s escape through Europe. Indy and Vadoma get to Armana at one point in the story. The potential to go to the ruins of Tuthmoses workshop and mention the bust of Nefertitit was not used. I also really liked that
Pompeji was used as a location and how it was connected to the artifact/story. Vadoma is a great Indy-girl and Indy has great chemistry with her.
There is a lack of a main villain. An evil german archeologist is mentioned in the beginning but not seen in the story at all. At the end of the story there is a Russian archaeologist and a German Major but they are introduced so late in the story that they can not be compared to a main antagonist. Since the majority of the plot focuses on Indýs escape through Europe a main villain is actually not needed here.
As other reviews have pointed out (and Monkey/primate admitted to that in a foreword) the ending of the story did not quite land. When the "unread pages" of the book got thinner and thinner I wondered when the final act / climax would begin. A lot more pages could have been used for the ending.
I like the setting of an
undiscovered tomb in the Valley of the Kings and it starts very well but it ended rather abruptly. Indy
doesn´t even get to see the Sun Tablets. The tomb caves in because of a firefight with the Nazis ... that should have happened AFTER Indy got to the tablets. The tablet are not even mentioned at the end of the book at all. I don´t mind the tomb caving in and getting flooded (and the tablets getting lost in there) BUT Indy and the reader needed to get to the tablets first!
So yes, the final act could have used more work BUT the story that lead to those last pages was really exciting and therefore gets a high recommendation from me! I will be doing a cruise on the Nile at the end of September. Will be cruising between Luxor to Aswan ... Indy cruised the Nile from Cairo to Luxor in the book (I will take that route by plane). So my cruise starts where Indy´s ended. I will be fondly thinking about this Indy-adventure when i am on the Nile in 2,5 months.